Black Thought

Hi I agree with the other two about use of the word 'ain't.' sometimes they’ll have steam coming out of them or something I'm not big on the line 'or ...

Not something i would normally read but its good. The main thing that bothered me is the 19th line. and the fall ain’t enough to kill me, but the word ...

What would be more poetic, actually, is you throwing everything away except for the last stanza. So you would cut all the fat and go straight to the main part ...

Haha, this reminds me of some of my old poems to get into a character's head. Although, like this poem, it wasn't very poetic at all. XD Conflict and such ...

Firstly, a great way to show why being a vegeterian help! Though, I personally, could never turn away from a big juicy peice of steak ! Applaud for the Title! ...

Smokes on a pickle, this is darn great! :) Holy Macintosh, I was caught all through this peice. I think the structure goes a 'lil funny when you start getting ...

Hello again, BlackThought! I was actually kind of disappointed by the conclusion, if only because it looks like nothing was really settled, and thus, nothing was really concluded. Maybe I'm ...

Okay... That bad huh? Guess I'll find something to do with my life. I was thinking about enlisting in the Air Force. lol Seriously though, any feedback will help me ...

I've been meaning to review this piece for a while, and I will get to it soon! I don't have the time now, but check this space later, I'll edit ...

That bad huh? Guess I'll find something to do with my life. I was thinking about enlisting in the Air Force. lol Seriously though, any feedback will help me figure ...

Thanks Jane! :) BlackThought, It was a school assignment and we were not allowed to use the word "said" I quite like the detail different words give but yes I ...

I skimmed through the first review and realized I have a slightly different opinion. Inserting a swear word every other sentence/every other paragraph is fine if that's the way your ...

Hey, You wonder why I sleep with a goddam 357 Magnum under my pillow and a fucking Mossberg shotgun under my bed. First thing I want to point out is ...

^^ Thanks, but somehow I doubt your friends wrote many stories like this one. You'll see why in the next part

'til. There should be the apostrophe at the beginning. And also, I have just about zero idea what all that stuff is at the end of your post. xD I'm ...